Grandparent’s Garden

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Grandparent’s Garden

Straight from the garden
carrots and peas
tomatoes and green beans
I eat as I please.

Berries and veggies
don’t make me frown
raw, sweet, and crisp
best food around.

Planted with love
straight from the vine
fresh from the soil
mine all mine!

grandma and grandpa
every spring a new garden
now sowing memories

© Rebecca Sanchez 2017

A prose/haiku style haibun about the best meal I ever ate with a seasonal haiku at the end written for dVerse~Poets Pub.

That would be my grandparent’s garden which us kids grazed from every summer. They always planted extra to compensate. I miss them very much.

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32 thoughts on “Grandparent’s Garden

  1. This brings memories back to me of dad and his garden… The pleasure of eating peas popped fresh from the pod and that wonderful smell and taste of tomatoes…
    Lovely write.
    Kind regards
    Anna :o]

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  2. such goodness we get from eating from the earth and foods planted by loving hands that tended the garden. the poem was so joyful like a sing a long song. and grandparents still remembered after they are gone. sweet!

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  3. We always had a garden. I loved the food that came from it and that which we would can/freeze for supper. although this is not a haibun I enjoyed it immensely. In order for it to be a haibun, it needs to be prosimetric. you may want to go back and take out the line breaks to form sentences. the haiku (last three lines) is perfect for this memory. This has such a friendly feel to it. Thank you for sharing your memories with us.

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    1. I disagree. This is a Western haibun depending on what you read. So many classic Japanese forms have been updated not just for other languages but for the times. I’m trying something new for haibun and I did my research before doing this. There are many different thoughts about haibun forms depending. I agree I used the term prose rather incorrectly.

      Even Jack Kerouac wrote about the haiku in his time and how it’s changed. My best friend from the UK who is a published award-winning haiku (and other Japanese forms) poet frowns on the 5,7,5 syllable count anymore, so it is the same with haibun changing.

      Some of the haibun I read yesterday (from the prompt) aren’t real haiku at the end. Real haiku doesn’t continue on another line or use sentences, each line is a complete thought with or without a break. Many are free verse following the haiku count.

      I guess it just depends on the person writing it but I like to think poetry is changing even as we know it. I’d like to agree to disagree. Thank you for giving me your true opinion I find it refreshing. I enjoyed talking about this. Any last thoughts?

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      1. Disagree all you wish especially as I specified in the prompt “tight paragraphs”. I do not consider anything “Western” to be Japanese, only Western. I do not consider it a haibun but it was pleasant to read.

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      2. I actually have quite a few last thoughts but prefer not to share them as you do not have a clue about a traditional haibun. I suggest you read Basho’s (who created the haibun BTW) Road to the Deep North english translation. You may get a few ideas there. When you have studied, taught, and written haiku, haibun, choka, and other Japanese poetic forms for 3+ years, you can comment. I’m glad your friend in the UK won some sort of an award for haiku but….I will accept that haiku can be written short/long/short but unless it has a season word and a cutting word, it is not a haiku. It is senryu, American Sentence, Micropoetry, etc. there is such a thing as tradition in Japan. And I have been a member of the Japanese Haiku Society for 20+ years. So you write your poetry and call it haibun. I call it simply ABAB taDah, taDah poetry. Nuff said. No more arguments on my part. I have said my peace and that is that. While I am directing the haibun Monday prompts, I will only accept true haibun and haiku. I will not accept any bastardizations of them.

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