Last Goodbye
Every single cell in me
can identify what I lack…
the only man I ever loved.
(Now I can’t win you back!)
A lover like no other
you turned out to be
my extraordinary man…
who saw something, in me.
But now you love her!
I don’t know how I lost…
please forgive me my sins
and this line I have crossed.
Now you’re dead where you lay-
the crime fits like a glove.
But I feel so much better,
“Goodbye now, my love.”
© Rebecca Sanchez 2013
I took an older poem that had punctuation to link with my friends at dVerse~Poets Pub. I took some time off from writing and am slowly dipping my toes back into the poetry river. I believe in using punctuation and use it in my poems something I started a long time ago when a friend convinced me.
I like this poem a lot Bekkie, better to morn that losing to another?
I think this is more common than we might think.. the careful punctuation worked very well.
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Thank you, Bjorn I’m so happy you liked it! Hugs!
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Never cross with a jealous woman ~ Good one and lovely to see you back Bekkie!
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Good to be back, Grace! Thank you!
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Reads like a companion piece to Harry Nilsson’s “You’re Breaking My Heart.” Nicely bitter… nicely punctuated. Permanently punctuated!
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Thanks so much!
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You are welcome!
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There’s always a way to get even. Nice use of ellipses.
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Always….thanks, Frank!
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Twisted!
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Glad you thought so!
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Oh my! That’s a jealous lover.
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Murder, she wrote.
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🙂
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You have My Thoughts.
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Thank you for stopping by!
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You are Welcome Bekkie.
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Oh My, Pretty heavy stuff. The punctuation works really well.
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Many have felt this way but only a few act on it. Lol! Thank you!
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