Time To Fly
The sun watches all from high in the sky
caterpillar to butterfly, miracles so small
when wings become dry it’s time to fly.
Everything smells wonderful and clean
flowers and grasses grow so tall
the sun watches all from high in the sky.
In the warmth, my mood is serene
outside the sunlight touches all
when wings become dry it’s time to fly.
There is magic in the color green
and music plays in nature’s call
the sun watches all from high in the sky.
The spirit renews in life’s routines
slow and steady the protocol
when wings become dry it’s time to fly.
Many mysteries remain unseen
constantly changing our tiny blue ball
the sun watches all from high in the sky
when wings become dry it’s time to fly.
© Rebecca Sanchez 2017
This is my first Villanelle and I hope it’s written correctly. Written with my friends at dVerse~Poets Pub. Shared with my friends at Poets United.
Beauty!! Love the repetitive nature of the poem! ☺♥
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Thank you, Phil! Hugs!
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I love the butterfly metaphor.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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Beautiful job! It’s a really difficult form.
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It was a little confusing, thank you!
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I never thought of being renewed in spirit through daily routines—till I read your poem! 😉
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Thank you so much!
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I found the villanelle a most difficult format, and yours has a nice rhythm to it. Well done!
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I found it difficult too but it’s nice to challenge ourselves isn’t it? Thank you, Beverly!
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I liked the sound of the poem and the theme of the sun watching and drying so one can fly. It fits the current dVerse prompt. A traditional villanelle would have only two rhyme sounds, not three, but I was also looking for modifications of the traditional villanelle. So this fulfills the prompt by writing a modified villanelle. I liked the phrases “magic in the color green” and “So many mysteries remain unseen”.
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Thank you, Frank! I used the example from Colin Lee’s villanelle and got the 3 rhyme sounds from that somehow. I’m happy for your critique so glad I got it correct and now I know it only takes 2 rhyme sounds which would make it much easier. Lol!
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Correct or not the poem has a great feeling in it.
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Thank you, Oldegg! Hope you’re having a nice week.
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Great cadence to this 🙂
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Hello, CC! Thank you for visiting.
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I’m not an expert on villanelles, but I enjoyed your use of the form!
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Thanks, Sue!
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