The Twist
I took the bait
a twist of fate
there was too much
heaped on my plate
it’s now too late
to clean the slate
the twist it made
me turn to hate.
A real bad trait
I’m that low-rate
in a terrible state.
© Rebecca Sanchez 2016
Written with dVerse~Poets Pub.
Capricious Poet 
Nicely drafted..
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Thank you so much it was my first Quadrille with dVerse.
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Very nice..all the best for many more 🙂
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You are so sweet thank you!
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Always welcome 🙂
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The rhyme was refreshing! A clear reminder of how easily we can be drawn into dark places where we lose ourselves.
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And then it makes us feel so bad, it can be a bottomless pit. Thank you!
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I really enjoyed the rhyme flow in this piece. I think it’s best not to hate 🙂
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As bad as hate is we all fall into that trap at some point in our lives.
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Love the rhyme scheme in this piece. It made the poem flow effortlessly. Well done.
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Thank you so much, I do like to write poems that rhyme probably better than free verse.
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Sounds like you were backed into a corner of your own making with too much on your plate, Bekkie. The outcome is no fun!
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When pushed into hate most of us do feel bad sometimes even chiding ourselves like this. Thank you!
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You’re so right…I can relate!
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I really like your use of rhyme and rhythm. Well done.
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Thanks Patti, when I decided on 4 words to a line it worked out very well.
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Hate is a twist we should never be baited to take… love how you worked with rhymes here,
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Thank you Bjorn I love rhyme!
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Well done rhyme and rhythm in this. Too much on one’s plate is oft our fate.
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That is so true Victoria. Thanks for coming by and commenting!
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Remorse at decisions made in one’s naivety! I don’t think it’s silly. Rather well put.
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Thank you so much!
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the real twist did the work in first two lines….
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I’m glad you think so Sumana!
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That’s a tough twist. Well done, Bekkie.
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Thank you for reading it Mary.
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The twist to the hate would be difficult to undo ~ Good to see you Bekkie ~
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Hate is an ugly thing but we all fall into it. Nice to see you always Grace!
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Love the rhythm of your rhyme here!
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When I read it now it seems kind of silly. Lol! Poems are like that aren’t they? Thanks for coming by and commenting.
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